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Altaïr Ibn-La'Ahad ([personal profile] haydiving) wrote2012-03-10 06:20 pm
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[personal profile] accommodated 2012-04-06 08:53 pm (UTC)(link)
I 'm in no way trying to be negative, but I've noticed that, while not at all bad (great even!) Altaïr's dialogue sounds, it seems to halt when it comes to network sort of interactions. It's difficult to put into words, since that's not always a bad thing. It's not that he says too much or too little at all. It just doesn't really flow as smoothly. At least not to me?

I was wondering if you were having trouble with finding a particular pattern? Something that can balance it out in writing to make it seem less off kilter. If so, I recommend trying different patterns of interactions with someone you like to RP with and trust to definitely help you work out the kinks with. I've found it extremely helpful for myself to not exactly practice, but figure out a good medium.

If I wasn't clear or concise enough, let me know!
Edited 2012-04-06 20:54 (UTC)
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[personal profile] haydiving 2012-04-06 09:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Ugh, no, I was actually kind of worried about this. When it comes to Altaïr in network posts I always feel like something is missing and/or wrong in his replies, and I know I've felt that way very strongly particularly with Desmond. For that I'm sorry. :\


I will definitely try to work it out. It's actually one of the reasons I started playing the 1st games again, to try and see if I could figure out what I wasn't getting down.

Thanks for the concrit!
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[personal profile] accommodated 2012-04-06 09:05 pm (UTC)(link)
You're welcome! If there's anything I can do to help, just let me know!

Sometimes it just comes down to flow, and I've had a long, difficult fight with that, myself. I know how that feels. So don't give up!
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[personal profile] haydiving 2012-04-06 11:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks! I just may do that! I'm glad you said something though. Since it's my first time playing him I would certainly prefer to get that flow down rather than flounder and ultimately end up dropping him, or worse, getting used to a voice that isn't right.

Thank you for being so polite too, while being constructive. It means a lot.
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[personal profile] accommodated 2012-04-07 03:05 am (UTC)(link)
What are castmates for? Like I said: let me know if there's anything I can help with!
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